preface
The weekly magazine contains the yuye shiye, which is evaluated to try it, so it is called "weekly jade test". The Book of Verses has clouds: "If it is like cutting, it is like grinding." "Jade is bright and bright, Shenfa will be conducive to appreciation; jade flaws are slightly flawed, and points may be beneficial to the instrument." Poetry friends exchange, exchange collisions, brainstorming, is also expected. The public heart of the critic, the peace of the poet, the appreciation of the reader, the heart of the editor, the holding of these four hearts, the common elegant thing, is not happy!
In this issue of Xiaolou's "Weekly Jade Test" column, guests are invited to choose a number of first comments and publish them in [Xiaolou Weekly (281): 2022 Issue 11]. (Those who voluntarily participate in the Xiaolou [Weekly Jade Test] column, please pay attention to the public account first, and the next guest will leave a message from the back of each weekly or weekly magazine, and choose a number of comments and publish them on all platforms of Xiaolou.) All kinds of xiaolou's comment works will be published in the "Xiaolou Recommended Poems" column group fixed in the "Chinese Poetry Education" paper journal. If you have any objections, please leave a message to contact the editor. ）
Hi receive a farmhouse real estate certificate
Pan Wenliang (Jiangxi)
Looking at the green apricot fat on the edge of the fence, I pity the new contract gilded emblem.
The spring breeze first went to the farm yard, and did not envy the change of agriculture to non-agriculture in that year.
Chen Tingyou commented: Typical scenes, typical objects, typical angles, and finally typical works.
Chen Zhiwen commented: The article is written in conjunction with the times, and the real scene is easy to move. The comparison between reality and history reflects the voice of the farmer from the side.
Five Songs of Early Spring (Part 3)
Dong Yanhui (Heilongjiang)
The breeze spread over the willow banks and led me to Hexi.
Waiting to search for golden sentences, the spring bud has broken the problem.
Chen Tingyou commented: The concept is clear, the language is smooth, full of wisdom, and it can be called a superior product. Only the first sentence is rambling, slightly contradictory. Change "over" or "up", then open and open. Praised as the best product, disdainful but also.
Spring is coming
Song Caixia (Beijing)
The spring breeze is like a distinguished guest, and when it arrives, it sprouts orchids.
Sit firmly on the top of the head and attract countless flowers.
Chen Tingyou commented: Although this poem is untitled, the imagery belongs to the spring wind. Scrape from head to tail, proper protagonist. Only the word "countless" in the end, lack of image sense, "full of land" and "full of trees" are cute, Cai Xia I beg you to change it!
February Blue
Zhang Guixing (Beijing)
The spring breeze sweeps away the spring cold and awakens the February orchid by the fence.
Jing Xiao feels that the world is big, and the sun gives a little self-congratulation.
Chen Tingyou commented: Cai Xia Guixing, Lan Mei Lan Brother. This song is all spring breeze. You've got it, right? This poem also allows the spring wind to open the way, awaken the orchid, weave the weather, and generate feelings. Very good! I thought that the word "feelings" did not need to be included in poetry, and the word "joy" also felt blunt. For example, how about changing it to "Jing Xiao can tolerate the world and the earth, and the sun gives a little joy"?
On the 33nd anniversary of enlistment, he met with comrades in the city
Yao Quanming (Wuhan)
In the early spring of the bing station, the spirit was like a peach and plum branch.
Thirty-two years of work, frost grinding fine plating silk.
Chen Tingyou commented: When I saw the soldiers, I felt kind. After reading the good poems, I feel even more exuberant. Fifty years of work, extreme stupidity, green silk is not fine, shame and shame.
Campus Spring Morning (Teacher Cui Dehuang)
Shen Xiaoming (Zhejiang)
The open window overlooks a pool of seclusion, fortunately I live on the top floor.
Fangfu can be appreciated in spring and autumn, and the babbling does not stop flowing in the morning and evening.
Reading books is difficult to stop Shen Lang is thin, and listening to birds can dispel faith and sorrow.
The birds sing like a rally, and the long rhyme is the spotted dove.
Chen Tingyou commented: The second rhyme is not easy to be good, but this work can be exaggerated. Understand Xiao Chang, in one go, use the code without hindrance, use the vulgar elegance. Only the autumn characters of the jaw link, making big rhymes, reading is not pleasant, easy to be on.
Nong Yin was stunned
Chen Weixuan (Jiangsu)
It seems to feel the dragon and snake moving, smelling the wind and opening its eyes.
Mei was shocked by the rain and was afraid of running thunder.
The worldly rong pillow, Lin Qiu far away from the debate.
When the flames are exhausted, the four seas look at the spring return.
Chen Zhiwen commented: The poem has a new line, enough to add green eyes. "The old man is afraid of running thunder", implying his life, but also has feelings and resonance.
The return of the old wife pinching wild leeks (tong rhyme)
He Yuexiang (Hunan)
The leaves and flowers match the birds and entertain each other, and the Bisi Mountain Road is winding.
Entering the hospital does not mention hunger and thirst, busy dividing the neighbors in the spring.
Chen Zhiwen commented: Words have substance, strong breath of life, and read kindly. Only words can be reconsidered. Happy knots, "multitude" change " and " more natural."
morning glory
Wang Huiwei (Shandong)
The breeze passes through the green stream, and the flowers bloom in the miscellaneous vines.
Weak tall buildings can not climb, in front of the door climbed bamboo fence.
Chen Zhiwen commented: Using flowers as a metaphor for people, speaking out of their hearts, being poor and lowly without reducing their aspirations and joys, and seeing feelings. The second word "climb" is better to change the word "lead".
Butterflies love flowers
Chen Weiqiang (Fujian)
A tree of red will eventually turn blue. In order to ask the residual flowers, what is the benefit of brilliant blooming? Looking for old traces of incense one by one, the heart marks gradually resemble moss marks. Tangled green vines wrapped around the embroidered wall, across the rain and smoke, looking at the spring breeze. Mo Geng leaned on the fence to listen to the night flute, and Qinghui was full of sorrow and invincibility.
Chen Zhiwen commented: The words are sophisticated, and the poetry lines are fine. Sorrowful spring is more worrying than worrying, a little bit of feeling.
Partridge day ・ there is a mail
Yang Min (Shaanxi)
——In the years of the epidemic, I suddenly received Brother Lantian and Sister Mo's Yanshu to inquire about safety. Recalling the spring gathering in Xianyang, the sound of the water, the blossoming of the ancient road, and now the wind and clouds are scattered, each of them is sad. After Xianyang parted, Brother Lantian returned to Lanzhou, the young brother went overseas, Sister Mo married Hanzhong, I am now jiangnan, Xi'an and Weicheng second brother do not know where they are. Flowers have other lives, people ask for more! This note.
The clouds are in the blue sky and the stars are in the river, and they have been consuming themselves for thirteen years. Xianyang autumn old sound dust less, Long shang through winter frost and snow more.
Flowers lag behind, months come and go. How the smoke and rain of the rivers and lakes are near. At that time, each of them went to the spring wind, and did not plant carrots to the empty mountain.
Chen Zhiwen commented: Farewell on xianyang road, because of the background of history, it is more touching. In today's floating world, the friendship between poets is precious and empathetic.
Early spring outing
Kong Mei (Huainan)
The cold breeze is warm at the beginning of the day, and the path is unflowered.
The original Shangdongjun could not stop it, and his heart wanted to sprout in the winter.
Chen Yinyi commented: If you want poetry, you must first embrace it, and use words to go out of the ancient and into the new, which should be the key to not being conventional. This "winter heart wants to sprout", with a metaphor for people, a pun, natural, chic and meaningful, is a good sentence.
Congratulations on the opening of Youran Court
Yao Haining (Zhejiang)
The city is full of new traces, and the cultural context has its own roots for thousands of years.
The rising rooster announced that the leisurely pavilion had opened its doors.
Chen Yinyi commented: Poetry is taboo, poetry should be integrated into the scene, poetry should be flavorful, interesting and profound. Although Brother Haining's poem is a cliché, the last two sentences are transformed into poems, and there is also some pyrotechnic taste.
Peach Blossom Returns to Two Rhymes (One)
Chu Jiachong (Hunan)
After falling crimson and leaving green branches, Liu Lang's bottom thing was always late.
The drizzle of the clothes is really Lanke, and the eyes are green like the past.
I lost the spring breeze on the bridge, wandering among the mud trees who.
Gui He remembered the peach blossom noodles, and randomly lit up the cinnabar a stone pool.
Chen Yinyi commented: The work is stable and unique, and it embodies the poetry of the ancients independently and can continue the ancients in the norm, and this law can be used as a paradigm.
Butterfly Love Flower Linhai Municipal Government Kindergarten
Chi Jian (Zhejiang)
Just happened to meet Shen Monkey to worship the moon. The kindergarten is open, and the autumn fragrance in the dream is folded. Since then, Lucheng has flown colorful butterflies, carrying the care of the singers and dancers. Mo Dao through the wind through rain and snow. Daily dedication of tenderness, simmering the blood of the original heart. The sound of fertile branches and seedlings resounds in Zhejiang, and every year it always cultivates new tillers.
Chen Yinyi commented: Chi Daren is good at composing plain sentences, "every year always cultivates new tillers" when it is a different tune outside the poem. Only kindergartens, the word "folding" is still used with caution.
Eight voices ganzhou nongyin zhongchun recalls climbing Xinchang chuanyan nineteen peaks
Yi Zhang (USA)
Intercept the heavenly soldiers to the dangerous rock column, and the eternal face is idle. Sigh cloud root splitting bamboo shoots, ginseng stars roaring tiger, absolutely Senran. Without the exquisite thanksgiving, the feet climbed. Can't bear the dust and look at the world, afraid of broken beads.
Several sticky peak lizards, hate has evolved, and the heart is hanging at this time. Zhaquan is cracked, and Wen Xiang sword skills are passed on. Dyeing bamboo wind, beautiful green song, said that eastern Zhejiang, hidden Qin Immortals. Thinking, where the phantom dragon is, and the water is flowing.
Chen Yinyi commented: Reading like a big river on the moon, looking at the sword in the lamp, it should be a heroic person to make a cool word.
On the morning of March 8, we will see the great spring color and give five laws and one song
Chen Rende (Chongqing)
The wild spring is quiet, and the sky is clear and the color is slight.
The wind through the curtain is getting warmer, and Mu Swift has returned.
The disciples passed each other frequently, and Wang Sun had been absent for a long time.
Occasionally chanting a sentence, the heart is flying in the clouds.
Chen Xijun commented: The three-couplet form can be seen in Zhang Xue Lao Du, and the neck and tail two-link realm resembles a mojie.
The jaw is full of love, and the sentence is seen alone, like the opposite of "the spring wind does not know what is in Luo Wei"; the single chant is pronounced in front of the eyes with the scene of "micro swift double flying". Look better together, wear the curtain in addition to the spring wind, there are swallows, Feng Zhengzhong "wear the curtain haiyan double fly away", Mu Yu can have swallows without wind, Tao Ling "light rain from the east, good wind with it", can continue the pastoral faction.
Old stone mill
Li Yongshi (Shandong)
A few degrees of star shifting things for new things, the guardian stone crushed the dark wound god.
Or because of the old age, there is no circle to give up people.
Chen Xijun commented: The first two sentences have large openings and closings.
Jiang Youshi Society Nong Yin Tai and the annual meeting of Feng He QingYi Brother Welcome Poems
Huang Yonghui (Jiangxi)
Enjoy the flowers to see frequently, and the willows are new when they fly.
The wind and moon Qingming chatted about self-adaptation, and the tern Erru explained the blind date.
If you want to write a poem and temporarily forget about public affairs, you must get drunk and call the people in the society first.
I want to look forward to the southeast to ascend the Fast Pavilion, and play songs when it is very springy.
Chen Xijun commented: Natural and smooth, the sentences used are appropriate, and the whole poem can be summarized with a quick word. The jaws are the best, you can enjoy the scenery alone, but you can enjoy with the poets. "Tern" knows the poetry society and "Erru" can know deep friendship. The poetry society or the South Mountain Pastoral and Walden Lake in the author's heart.
Wing Chun rain
Yang Ziyi (Huizhou)
Silently won the name of the object, and the night was full of dreams.
The fangzuka has been sealed to leave a trail, and the pear blossom has been borrowed in vain to complain about the sentiments.
At the end, it is morning and cloudy before twilight pregnancy, and it should be known that spring sounds strange and autumn sounds.
The politicians of the United States with the car called shu and annihilated the voices of human suffering.
Chen Xijun commented: There is a new meaning, an anti-spring rain commonly used imagery, elegant and correct. Shoulian and Yishan "overseas vainly heard more Kyushu, he was born uncertain of this life rest" is the same thing, from smell to see, disillusionment. Su Xiaoxiao "Under the Xiling Tomb, the wind blows and rain", Yang Yuhuan "pear blossoms a branch of spring with rain", the goddess is familiar with the song, and Zheng Hong is directly used with the car to the rain, which shows kung fu.
Guest Profiles in this issue
Guest Rankings In alphabetical order
Chen Tingyou, born in 1954, is a native of Shenzhou, Hebei Province. He is a member of the Chinese Calligraphers Association, a member of the Chinese Writers Association, and a former executive director of the Chinese Poetry Society. He has served in the Counsellor's Office of the State Council and the Central Research Museum of Literature and History for a long time, and has served as deputy director of the office and director of the Organ Service Center, inspector, director of the Preparatory Office of the China Sinology Center, and first deputy editor-in-chief of the magazine "Chinese Calligraphers and Painters", a library journal of the Central Research Museum of Literature and History. Published poetry monographs "West Smear East Tu Collection", "Poetry Wings", long novels "Dragon Vein", "Que Que Mountain". He has held many exhibitions of personal poetry and calligraphy. He was invited to teach poetry and calligraphy at Tsinghua University, Peking University, Chinese Min University, Beijing No. 4 Middle School, and the Poetry Training Class for The Backbone Of Calligraphy of the Whole Army.
Chen Zhiwen, pen name Past Yunyan, works in the School of Geography and Environmental Sciences of Zhejiang Normal University, a director of the Zhejiang Poetry Society, the vice president and secretary general of the Jinhua Poetry and Yanglian Society, the director of the Chinese Poetry Website, the vice president of the China Internet Poetry Society, and the member of the poetry platform review committee of "Listening to the Rain in the Small Building". His works have appeared in several magazines.
Chen Yinyi is currently working at the Linhai City Museum. "Little Building Listening to the Rain" poetry platform review committee member. In recent years, he has published a collection of humanities, "Scattered Leaves in the Gui" and "Ask the Edge Collection", compiled and published the "Qianwang Iron Coupon Facsimile Book", planned and presided over the editing of "Pen Bottom Lake and Mountain - Linhai" and "Aral Series" (5 volumes), participated in the compilation of "Linhai Outline" and "Linhai Series", and planned and edited "Chinese Classic Poetry Reader".
Chen Xijun works for the Shanghai Municipal Public Security Bureau, a member of the Shanghai Public Security Literary Association, a member of the Shanghai Poetry Society, and is the author of "The History of Poetry of the Five Dynasties of the Late Tang Dynasty", whose poetry works and appreciation works have appeared in newspapers and magazines such as "Chinese Poetry", "Chinese Poetics", "Jing bao" and other newspapers and magazines, and has won the overall champion of the sixth season of the China Poetry Conference, the champion of the Qixi Special Program, and has served as a cultural guest on tv programs such as China Education Television and Jilin Satellite TV and central video, Sina Weibo, Tencent News, Douyin, Yunting fm and other new media platforms.
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