Foreword
According to the weekly magazine, Yu Ye Shi Ye, commented on it, so it is called "Weekly Test Jade". There is a cloud in the "Book of Songs": "If you cut it, you can learn it, and if you think about it, you can grind." "Yurun Guanghua, Shenfa will be conducive to appreciation; The jade flaws are slightly flawed, and the point is or beneficial to the instrument. Poetry friends to learn, exchange and collide, brainstorming, is also hopeful. Wouldn't it be nice for the commentator to be fair-minded, the poet to be fair-minded, the reader to appreciate it, and the editor's heart to hold these four hearts and participate in elegant things together!
In this issue of Xiaolou's "Weekly Jade Trial" column, guests are invited to select a few reviews and publish them in [Xiaolou Weekly (400): Issue 26, 2024]. (If you have volunteered to participate in Xiaolou's [Weekly Jade Trial] column, please pay attention to the official account first, and the next guest will leave a message from each issue of the weekly or the back of the weekly, choose a few reviews and publish them on all platforms of Xiaolou.) Xiaolou's various review works will be published in the fixed "Xiaolou Recommended Poems" column group on the "Chinese Poetry Teaching" paper magazine. If you have any objections, please leave a message and contact the editor. ）
Jiachen's summer solstice is about to happen
Yang Yiming (Shanghai)
The night is short and long, and the sun has not forgotten the yin.
The lotus wind comes ashore to spread the clear air, and the rainy season sends wonderful news through the clouds.
Seeking food and moving a few nests of ants frequently, singing still makes a forest of birds.
The old man improvised to grind new ink, and was changing the spring chant to the summer chant.
Jin Feng: The twelve invasions should be a dangerous rhyme, and the whole song reads without any sense of disobedience, smooth and free, and done in one go. The weather during the summer solstice and the author's state of mind are skillfully integrated into the poem, leaving room for the reader to reminisce. The special diptych artistic conception and combat techniques allow the reader to breathe the fresh air from the lotus wind and feel the wonderful sound sent by the plum rain. The rainy season is very disgusting, but the author can find fun in the rainy season, showing the author's optimistic attitude and view of the world, and reading poetry can read the author's frank heart. Neck couplet, tail couplet, the author of life and poetry is more light and bright, chic and free. Like a dynamic painting, the reader and the author can communicate in the painting, and the aftertaste is endless.
Lou Lijian: Writing "Summer Solstice", it is indispensable to describe the characteristics of the solar terms, but the author's original intention is not only here, "seeking food and moving a few nests of ants, and singing still make a forest of birds", this natural image, isn't it the world? This is what the author says, and this is the end of it. Don't be happy with things, don't be sad with yourself, conform to nature, "change the spring yin" and "do the summer yin", it is also a kind of mentality.
Question face payment
Qi Ruixia (Hebei)
It is unique in the world, and it can be recognized in an instant.
From now on, it all depends on this face.
Hong Junmo: Poetry is written because of the times, there are too many new things in modern times, few people write about face payment, the author has a different way, and the last two sentences have an extra layer of meaning, and there are a lot of people who want to see people's faces on the rivers and lakes, and the language is a pun.
The autumn wind is howling
Liu Daoping (Sichuan)
The sound of sunset and autumn rises, and the clouds roll into a groove.
敲山松子碎,击水小荷凋。
The old leaves are like snow, and the new sorrow is lingering.
Whoever binds the wind, don't make the frenzy!
Hong Junmo: The first sentence goes straight to the theme, the autumn sound is coupled with the flowing clouds to feel the prosperity of the autumn wind, and the chin and neck couplet is neat and neat to reflect the autumn one of the Xiao killing, the key is the end, "who will bind the wind, don't make the volume frenzy" knows that the wind is not bound, but comes to a knowingly question, which greatly increases the tension of the poem, and the last sentence also reflects the author's ambition, the poem is valuable in the author's thoughts, which can resonate with the reader is a superior work.
Home mountain scenery
Meng Qingwu(Meng Qingwu)
The mountains and mountains are as beautiful as poetry, and they are often unknown in this.
Ignoring the cause has been familiarized, cherishing spring is the most falling flowers.
Hong Junmo: This poem is natural and appropriate, it doesn't use any words to embellish but expresses a part of real life, which makes people involuntarily think of the feeling of traveling: running to travel in a place that is annoying to others. The concluding sentence is the author's opinion, only after losing it will be precious, although in the writing of the mountain, but it contains a strong philosophy, to make people slowly understand. It shows that the author has a strong insight into small things.
I remember the cool summer nights when I was a child
Dai Kechun (Chongqing)
Three wooden stools build a bed, count the stars and fall asleep.
There are always flowers and mosquitoes shouting, and the mother shakes the fan to guard the child.
Song Shanling: The small poem comes slowly, not branches, not branches, such as in the present. Although the idea is not new, it is also tasteful.
Watch the dragon boat race
Fan Dongxue (Hunan)
The boat is divided into track championships, and the spectators are like a tide, each with their own feelings.
In a wave of cheering, the most concerned point is winning or losing.
Song Shanling: The letter is written by hand, the meaning is exhausted, the language seems to be plain, but it is full of emotion.
After a pot chicken shop somewhere, I occasionally groaned
Ma Xinghui (Nanjing)
Walking slowly along the street after the rain, I suddenly heard a rooster crowing on the side of the store.
I don't know where the fragrance wafts, and a compatriot is being cooked again.
Song Shanling: The semantic new policeman is also sarcastic and indignant, chickens are like this, and people are not the same.
Feeling nostalgic for the 50th anniversary of the party
Liu Bixin (Hubei)
When he joined the party and was a village official, he looked back on the festival with a lot of feelings.
All the way to build dreams, fifty virtues and righteousness towering to the sky.
Zhijian is comparable to bamboo shoots in winter, and his body is as clean as a summer lotus.
People are rare in the past, and they are still persistent in writing new chapters.
Song Shanling: Good poetry but not good taste is due to the fact that there are many meanings and few images in the middle and two couplets, and the tail couplets are familiar.
Gather at Friends' Farm on summer weekends
Wang Congying (Liaoning)
A stream of clouds gathers as a screen, and people come here without worrying.
The cucumbers on the wind blowing frame are tender, and the beans and leaves are green in the butterfly dance garden.
He can bring sweet springs as wine, and abandon troubles without being invisible.
The new leek is cut by the king, just wave the sickle and don't stop.
Song Shanling: If the stream is flying down, there is no subtle turn, and it is naturally wonderful; Leisurely mind, can appreciate this wild interest. The poem title is too complicated, and it is better to "gather friends on the weekend farm".
Visit the tomb of Lizhou and visit the Dragon and Tiger Thatched Cottage
Zeng Fanrong (Shenzhen)
The school of Dongfang Li, the four kings of Yuyao.
Jun is light and plum, and the country is cold.
To the tomb of the three heads, look back at a grass hall.
Raise your voice from afar, smell the fragrance of flowers all over the field.
Jin Feng: The first couplet writes about Huang Zongxi's literary status, and the second couplet expresses Huang Zongxi's spirit and the environment in which he lived at that time. The worship of Mr. Huang Zongxi, the residence and cemetery of the triptych and the quadruple bring the reader into the scene at that time, and the picture sense is very good. The poem is decent, if the life of Mr. Lizhou can be used in the neck couplet or the tail couplet to add the author's thoughts, make an eye-hitting sentence, and attract the eyes of the reader, maybe the poem will be better.
Village Night
Safety East (Sichuan)
The sky is dark blue, and the mountain squats on all sides.
The sound of insects is chaotic like a new rise, and the village lights are miserable.
Jin Feng: Speaking with facts is the best proof, reading poetry is like being there, and now the real scene of the mountain village is in front of you, and the two sentences are very evocative.
Uyama
Wang 12 (Anhui)
The mountain is like a raspberry stream as a ring, and the people of the past have gone to Baiyun to idle.
A natural piece of mountain imprint, pressed in the landscape of Songyang.
Jin Feng: The metaphor is powerful, the exaggeration is in place, Zhang Chi has a degree, and he can retract and release freely. In just four sentences, the magnificence of Mount Mao and the legend are kneaded together, and the natural beauty and the author's heart pen are used to draw the scenery of Songyang into a picture of Songyang Mountain Residence. The carryover is brilliant.
Xijiang month, Jiachen summer solstice
Song Caixia (Shandong)
The duckling pond chases the water in front of it, and the breeze blows in the wild. Men make eggs in the small jungle and come to play Jiangnan boutiques.
Ande Lake Mountain is intentional, but there is no intention except poetry. The building is fortunate to have drunken flowers. Accompany me Qinglian Yunjin.
Jin Feng: Poetry comes from life, and it must be integrated into life, so that readers can taste good works. This Yanxi Jiangyue, there is no gorgeous word bath, no grandiose words, just a few scenes of life in the summer solstice, the author uses the language of life to skillfully sew them together and connect them into a comic book. The ducklings chase the water, the breeze blows, and the men break the eggs, which drags the reader into the painting consciously or unconsciously, and enjoys the Jiangnan boutiques together. The upper rung writes the scene, and the lower rung has to be lyrical, dragging the reader into the painting and not letting him go, listening to the author's sincerity. Hushan left his true feelings, but the author didn't care about anything other than poetry. Is the other really unintentional? No, the building has her favorite, Qinglian Yunjin. The author works from far and near, from the outside to the heart, step by step, pulling the reader into the scene she built, and sharing the state of mind of the summer solstice with her. It can be said that I have worked hard and entered the heart of poetry.
Drink Ruyang Du Kang
Jiang Heyou (Hebei)
The basalt spring is endowed with a strange fragrance, and the liver and sausage are washed under the Funiu Mountain.
In the breeze of the north of the cup, thousands of mash waves rise overnight.
Jin Feng: If you want to be bold in poetry, you must first pour wine into the tank, and this poem will feel resounding when you read it. Du Kang's incense, the poet's madness, drinking alone, drunk the whole Ruyang. The exaggerated technique makes the reader's lips also have the aroma of wine. No wonder someone gets drunk when they pass by Ruyang now, it's all your fault. Good poetry!
You Cixi Fulong Temple
Zhang Xuefang (Zhejiang)
The soles of the feet are lying in the sea and the sky, and the stone carvings on the head are hung on the clear river.
The mountains are full of green and the breeze is quiet, and the bells of a thousand years are in front of you.
Jin Feng: From the soles of the feet to the head, from a distance back to the eyes, the three-dimensional sense is strong, the location of the Fulong Temple, stone carvings, culture, history, scenery, all in the sentence. Tempting readers have to go for it.
Tonight (New Rhyme)
Cheng Yongzheng (Fujian)
Listen to the wind and rain outside the window, and the news is in the palm of your hand.
Sleepless than me, tonight over the flood peak.
Lou Lijian: One "listen" and one "search", paving the way for "Sleepless Tonight", "Sleepless Stop Me" speaks for the whole group, and "Crossing the Flood Peak Tonight" is like shaking the burden, making all the foreshadowing shine. See the spirit in the plain words.
Settle for it
Liang Xiaoping (Shandong)
Forget your joy and be a Buddhist.
But every gull is a friend, and I know that the butterfly is not me.
Guests don't come often, and poetry and books are enough to entertain.
Chat about yourself, and take the lead.
Lou Lijian: The joy of retreating, wrote the feeling of "the spring breeze is proud" in Meng Jiao's "After Dengke", writes about returning to nature, accompanied by poetry and books, the heart is as pure as a Buddha, and the life and temperament of self-comfort are naturally revealed, not pretentious. "But every gull is a friend, and I know the butterfly is not me" is quite interesting.
Scene after the rain
Chen Haiyang (Yunnan)
The old trees weep and the rain is clear, and the Longjiang River is rushing over the high city.
Gan Lin was originally descended from the blue sky, why is the world turbid.
Lou Lijian: Grace in the sky, disaster in the ground, not only "Ganlin". The three talents of heaven and earth are covered by heaven and earth, but "people" play a decisive role. If you don't say "people", the grace and misfortune are in heaven and earth, and if you say "people", you can't say enough. Good question!
Cixi Fulong Temple
Hong Junmo (Chengdu)
The car is more green and several heavy, and the Zhaoti Temple is hidden in the sea and the sky.
In the dust of the glass world, the Yunshui monk rang the bell of the world.
It may not be the same induction of the three continents, it turns out that they have all experienced supernatural powers.
The monks also talk about current affairs, but there are similarities and differences in Zen machines.
Lou Lijian: Write that the structure of Fulong Temple is rigorous, the pen is quiet, and the opening and closing are moderate. "The monks also talk about current affairs, but there are similarities and differences in Zen machines", the amount of information is large, the interest is strong, don't go out of the machine.
Tasha Xing, visit the second chief teacher of Meixianglou
Fang Yihong (Zhejiang)
Powder rain bridge bridge, greasy shore of fat waves. Across the river, it refers to Zhulanyuan. Comb the cage with a smile and make a lifelong commitment, but the life is by the green light.
Tete came to find, Yingying seems to see. The figure by the window is a fan. At that time, the blood was dyed with peach blossoms, and the flying red was a resentment.
Lou Lijian: The last film touches the scene, and the two seven-character sentences summarize Li Xiangjun's life, and the pen and ink are fine. The next film is emotional, grasps the core of the story of "Peach Blossom Fan", reveals the social reality of "Qinglou is all righteous and angry, and heroes are all dog slaughterers", and secretly praises the legendary character Li Xiangjun's righteousness, which is profound.
About the guests in this issue
The guests are ranked in order of eldest and youngest
Hong Junmo, a native of Jinjiang City, Fujian, lives in Chengdu and is a poetry lover. He is now a member of the Chinese Poetry Society, the Sichuan Writers Association, the holding society, the deputy editor-in-chief of Sichuan "Star Poetry", and a member of the review committee of the poetry platform of "Xiaolou Listening to the Rain". Published "Poetry and Grass of Yuanlu", "Manuscript of Yuanlu", "Selected Poems of Calligraphy and Painting Yuanlu", etc.
Song Shanling is a retired state-owned enterprise and a senior engineer. He is currently the director of the Chinese Poetry Society, the executive director of the Jiangsu Poetry Association, and the president of the Xuzhou Poetry Association.
Niu Yongwei, pen name Jin Feng, member of the Chinese Poetry Society, deputy secretary general of the Shanxi Poetry Society, editor and reviewer of the poetry platform "Xiaolou Listens to the Rain". He has participated in the editing of "On a Thousand Poems", "Poets of the Past Dynasties Yong Wutai Mountain", "A Collection of Commentaries on a Thousand Poems", and published a collection of poems with poets, such as "Collection of Extracts", "Selected Poems of Pen Pals", "Collection of Poems of Hanyou", "Collection of Savage Tribes", "Collection of Poetry Friends of Beishe", etc. His works have been published in poetry, magazines, and newspapers all over the country.
Lou Lijian is known as Kongkongdao people. Born in 1968, he is a native of Yiwu, Zhejiang. He is the director of the Chinese Poetry and Couplet Society, the consultant of the Zhejiang Poetry and Couplet Society, and the president of the Yiwu Poetry Couplet Society. He has won more than 300 awards in various poetry competitions across the country.
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